Epic. I like the way you put the poem. A good scheme to it.

Wow, it's been awhile since I've decided to give my opinion on writing, let me analize..

I liked the feel from it, It was like a story coming from the main chr. What I always get from poems like this, is that the author is trying to protray something about themselves, but the thing about reading poetry is when your reading it, the author doesn't exist. It's a chr made from the reader's own view or thought process from what he reads. I had to read a bit before I could put together a feeling of connection between the chr and I.

On an emotional level though, I could sympathise with her, whoever she may be. Always looked at as the bad guy has an effect on people so I have noticed, lol me being one of them. There is a desperate tone to it, but it's kind of hard to tell. What it seems like is that all this pain has been accepted, lowering the intensity. It's kind of like an explosion happened two doors down but you've accepted it and are living with it,so when you tell it again, because your not effected by it to the degree you were, it won't effect the person your telling as much either.

The story has a great feel to it though, it's kind of like I'm looking over what I've done and this is the general version of it. All in all, I liked it. Keep going Cratys

Last edited by WritingWulf (2008-12-30 14:28:02)

Cratys wrote:

Thank you, I like it when you analize my work...I didn't really think about this poem though. I just wrote it...I took what was in my head and put it unfiltered on paper. I added the next part to the story called "running" if you wouldn't mind looking over that sometime. But thank you...she, that wolf in the poem...I wish I didn't feel sorry for her...I haven't eaten all day. I wonder if real wolves fast when they're upset...

I will most undoubtably look at more of your writing Cratys, it would be a fun time. And I do hope things look up for you, if you want to talk to someone I'm always there to yell at lol. E mail me if you want to

Anytime Cratys, I can't stand to see a fellow writer be all sad. And I'm serious, you can email me anytime.

I will take a look for it, YIM? I have AIM, never heard of YIM though o.o

Added you

Last edited by WritingWulf (2009-01-02 16:14:16)

thought i'd bring this poem back to page one of this board. Looking back at it, I really like it...and thus ould like more opinions, should I make this a song?