The Werewolf Café / Some something called I look down

Moonfur · 2009-08-09 19:51:01

a simple something,i have no idea weather its a correct poem or what.
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I look down outside,
because it's too bright,
I look down outside,
because the light hurts,
I look down outside,
so I can see,
I look down outside,
and see a shadow,
and I look up,
to see him hiding me,
in his shadow.

Amarok · 2009-08-09 23:16:01

Simple, short, and oddly touching.

And who cares if it's iambic pentameter or whatever?

Moonfur · 2009-08-09 23:26:59

umm....thanks

clinteastwood95 · 2009-08-14 02:49:04

Amarok wrote:
And who cares if it's iambic pentameter or whatever?

Wah? Im not smart enough to understand that..

In a different way, I do understand this poem. Kind of hard to explain though..

Last edited by clinteastwood95 (2009-08-14 02:49:14)

Moonfur · 2009-08-14 20:48:36

yeah,it ws a bit hard to word out kinda...........i couldnt find the right words,and i think i still didnt

fangsofsorrow · 2009-10-15 08:57:13

i like it good job

Moonfur · 2009-10-15 12:08:29

thx,you should find my other stuff stuck....ill find em and bring em to the top.

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