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#1 2009-11-14 21:55:27
- scarletwolf94
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The only girl
It was another could day as I stepped out of my little house .Unlike other seventeen year old i did not go to school. Instead i spent the day with her pack hunting and killing;you see I am a a werewolf and werewolves and vampires don't get along too well..its more like a raging hate for each other. As I went to check on Dad to let him know I was leaving I saw Milo waiting in the drive way. His newly refurbished Volx wagon bus glistens in the faintly showing sun light. He had saved for three years to refurbish that pile of junk. When he caught my eye he smiled. His smile was one that would knock any girl dead except for me. Millo and I had been best friends since birth. Hell,we had turned werewolf together!i ran to the car.
“i have to tell Ron I'm going.”
i told Milo ducking my head through the open window .he he nodded with another one of though smiles. I smiled back ,kissed him on the cheek and ran to the garage at the back of the house. There was Dad head first into the hood of the car.
“Dad?”
“Yes?” was the muffled replied.
“Milos here...are you sure you don't need help?”
I was concerned about him keeping himself busy to keep thought of mom away.
“No,no, Chris is coming over soon,and ill have some company.”
“ok,love ya Dad.”
“love you too.” he said still digging around in the car.
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“Hes still working on that old bug?”Milo asked as I got in.
“yep,” I said throwing my gym bag in the back seat.
“ow!” Scarlet,who was Milo's nephew, said rubbing his nose. I looked back.
“Sorry Red,i didn't see you there. You Ok?”
“ya I'll be fine” he said shoving the bag to the floor.
ok ppls this is my rough draft and i want u all to pick it appart!!!!
meet me in the light of the moon....
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#2 2009-11-14 22:08:39
- Exanimis
- Just an Old Dog
- From: North Carolina U.S.A.
- Registered: 2009-11-13
- Posts: 198
Re: The only girl
Ummm, No. Other than a few spelling errors, I see nothing wrong with it. You have done a great job with the conversations so far.
Oh, and welcome to the forums.
Last edited by Exanimis (2009-11-14 22:09:10)
There is sorrow enough in the natural way From men and women to fill our day;
And when we are certain of sorrow in store, Why do we always arrange for more?
Brothers and Sisters, I bid you beware Of giving your heart to a dog to tear.
from"The Power of the Dog" by Rudyard Kipling
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#3 2009-11-14 22:18:52
- scarletwolf94
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Re: The only girl
thanks...i really suck at spelling!!! thanks for the comment i hope to have another part soon! 
meet me in the light of the moon....
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#4 2009-11-14 23:29:08
- scarletwolf94
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Re: The only girl
“we still have to get Wilt, Ember, and Neaf” Milo said while he pulled out of the drive way.
When we pulled off of Massiquoi Drive Red broke the comfortable silence.
“So...” he began “Another cold day,ay Rowan?”
Millo had told me Red had had a crush on me before he was able to walk.
“Ya”i agreed looking out the window.”How are your attempts going?” I ask quickly,hopping to change the subject.
“It sucks!” he said looking at the ceiling “i cant even break 100 degrees.” he huffed. I new he would turn some day;how did I know?His eyes...they where the deepest gold I have ever seen any any ones eyes. It made me want to cry knowing the pain he go through.
“Enjoy it while you can.”Millo said eying Rend through the mirror.
“Ya ya I know ' It's painful and makes you a monster.'” Red quoted rolling his eyes.
“He is right,Red, we can barley get through the day without losing our tempers.”I shamefully admitted glancing the changing moon tattoo that forever marked me as a werewolf. Red just glared out the window. I shrugged and propped my feet on the dash board.
now rip this...
meet me in the light of the moon....
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