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#1 2010-07-24 21:13:06
- UlfrAndi
- Spirit Walker
- From: Your Darkest Dreams
- Registered: 2010-05-26
- Posts: 13066
Whole Again.
ok this one is not on the fly at all guys it took me about half hour to get this one (that sounds a little too long now that i think about it) but here goes 
A great debt I owe to you,
But i know not what i can do.
You have filled my hollow heart,
Taking nothing's place, becoming a vital part.
You are always on my mind,
Casting other thoughts behind.
You have healed my broken soul,
Because of you I feel whole.
And yet, there is something that I lack,
And that is a way to pay you back.
I hope you all enjoyed this. this one also is dedicated to my mate. please give me some feedback 
And if strength is born from heartbreak,
Then mountains I could move.
And if walls could speak,
I pray that they would tell me what to do
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#2 2010-07-25 00:04:04
- SilentKiller
- So very silent its killing
- Registered: 2010-06-21
- Posts: 2532
Re: Whole Again.
I love it! whoever your mate is... they are the luckiest person in the world. 
Having faith is better than nothing.
Dont worry I wont bite you. I only bite people I really like.
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#3 2010-07-25 14:52:47
- Darkwolf117
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- Registered: 2010-07-20
- Posts: 23
Re: Whole Again.
I liked it. Smooth flow overall, and the last two lines hit pretty nicely following the ones before 'em, at least I think anyway. Good job 
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#4 2010-07-25 16:43:01
- UlfrAndi
- Spirit Walker
- From: Your Darkest Dreams
- Registered: 2010-05-26
- Posts: 13066
Re: Whole Again.
thanks guys
And if strength is born from heartbreak,
Then mountains I could move.
And if walls could speak,
I pray that they would tell me what to do
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#5 2010-07-25 23:09:06
- Kormiak Rue
- Bard of the Forum
- From: Warrior's Hold
- Registered: 2010-06-19
- Posts: 4476
Re: Whole Again.
Excelent work there, dluthchara, excelent work!!!!
"Póg mo thóin!" -Irish "Saying"............
"Molon labe" -Meaning "Come and get them" This was the Greek response to the Persians order to surrender their weapons at the Thermopylae pass in 480 B.C.E.................
"Qoud vides fecisse, factum ducas" -Latin, meaning "What you see is done, so consider it done"
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#6 2010-07-26 02:33:55
- UlfrAndi
- Spirit Walker
- From: Your Darkest Dreams
- Registered: 2010-05-26
- Posts: 13066
Re: Whole Again.
thank you Kor *bows*
And if strength is born from heartbreak,
Then mountains I could move.
And if walls could speak,
I pray that they would tell me what to do
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#7 2010-07-30 15:23:13
- Snow_Wolfy
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- Registered: 2010-07-29
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Re: Whole Again.
your poems are very sweet and heartwarming
Have no fear, for I am an Intellectual Badass!
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#8 2010-07-30 15:24:20
- UlfrAndi
- Spirit Walker
- From: Your Darkest Dreams
- Registered: 2010-05-26
- Posts: 13066
Re: Whole Again.
I normally write what i feel. lol it normally works for me
And if strength is born from heartbreak,
Then mountains I could move.
And if walls could speak,
I pray that they would tell me what to do
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#9 2010-08-27 14:47:10
- Mitch01
- Rising Angel
- From: Bronx, NY
- Registered: 2010-08-24
- Posts: 1798
Re: Whole Again.
wow SK should be so happy to get these poems Good Job again Ulfr!
i wasn't designed to handle the worst and i'm not convinced that loving someone is worth it...
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