*almost bursts with excitement*YAY!!!!!!!!!.....very very goood!!....keep going!!*near bursting*

hmm....Midonaito.means moonlight.

GAH!!!!*waits patiently*

very good,as always.

ok i really wanted to post this so here it is!!!


Not long after that I see my target walking with his bodyguards towards my cave. “Why is he headed here…unless he found out that I was here…shite…I had better activate my traps� I say to myself and I get to work dragging the traps into the cave entrance and in the various connected tunnels just to be safe then I flip my hood back on so my face can’t be seen and I drink some tea and wait to be found. After about 15 minutes of waiting they arrive and get caught by my first trap and are dangling from the ceiling. “The triple leg noose always works� I say under my breath before I walk up to them “Why have you invaded my home?� I asked them in a calm voice.
“We were informed that a dangerous monster resided here and we came to dispose of it� my target told me with a little fear and confusion in his eyes.
“Well my friends it seam you were mislead since I am no monster just a simple hermit who lives by himself and I know you are wondering about the traps, they are there so dingos and what not stay away from me when I sleep now may I ask your names before  I let you down?â€�
“I am Takato and these two are my associates Kamati and Fardren�
“Nice to meet you I am Fenrik, now hold still while I lower you to the ground.�
“Ouch…Fardren stop eating so much you nearly squished me.�
“Sorry sir�
“Just get off me�
“Yes sir� Fardren says before he moves off of Takato.
“Well do you want some tea? I made some earlier�
“Sure we would love to�
As we all sat down and drank some of my herbal sweet green tea I debated on whether or not to kill them since Takato is my target. Just as we were finishing up I made my mind and steeled myself for a fight when I heard a howl and saw a pack of dingos barreling towards my cave and I cursed…loudly “****�(A/N I won’t put hardcore cussing in here but the words damn and shite may come up from time to time) “Takato I will need your help to kill these beasts� I lie through my teeth knowing I could kill them all with my bare hands but it would make the perfect setting for killing him
“Sure thing Fenrik just sit back and let us handle this�
“Thanks� I said as I readied my knives to throw at Takato and his men. As I watched them fight I say and opening from Fardren and threw my knife and hit him in the neck and I quickly ran to him and pulled out the knife saying “Fardren is down one of the dingos got him in the throat with its claws and it looks fatal from all the blood pouring out�
“Damn mangy mutts, I’ll blow their brains out� Kamati said before he went back to shoots the dingo pack but didn’t notice the dingo behind him until it had knocked him down and ripped out his throat.
“NO Kamati! That’s it now I’m pissed� Takato yelled as he drew a long sword and expertly swung it at the dingo pack. I grinned as I watched him do that giving me the perfect opportunity to grab my rapier and join the fight.
“Don’t worry I got your back Takato� I assured him as we killed dingos left and right.
“Well at least you know how to handle a sword�
“Well I had a good teacher� I said as I thought back to Sarios who had taught me how to use any weapon and was a little surprised when I chose the rapier as my main weapon. Then I remembered that I was fighting not reminiscing about my past and then I saw an opening and I took it driving my rapier into his heart from behind.
  “Wha what ughâ€� he said as he coughed up blood once and died.
“Mission accomplished… now to head back to town� I said out loud to myself as I burn the bodies so there is no evidence.

hope you enjoyed chapter 2!

To make it easier to read, try separating your paragraps and when each character speaks. But other than that, I really like it so far (I'll post more of a critique when I get back later)