I'm not sure I like the revision,about him being half and half, but I do like how it speaks from the characters point of view. What you should do is make the chapter the persons point of view for example Chapter 1: Rose than Chapter 2: Rodney something like that you know. but I really like it so far.

I am coming across problems that I am hoping you guys can give me some answers to. My first chapter is only three pages long but in those three pages it describes how my 1st character is developed and came to be. keep in mind that i am writing this in manuscript form so maybe three 8 by 11 pages can equal more than three book pages. I basically need help introducing my 2nd main character. Guess yall would have to read the 1st chapter before i get advice but its not complete without the 2nd main character.

I am also writing a book that takes place in 16th century France during the musketeers and king Louie 6th. It has a similar plot as the three musketeers and a bit of time travel and a bit of divinci code. pretty coole.