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#1 2009-07-15 18:52:28
- FenrirFinale
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Heart Notes
I close my eyes against the pain
The sweet sound of falling rain
Is all I hear in my dreams
A soft pulse a steady beat
A kind love a burning heat
Heart breaking notes wash over me
The music makes me feel
And tears start to spill
Spill over in a flood of gratitude
I'm never felt love of this magnitude
Ice melts from my veins and I feel the pain
But under it all is the hope
Hope of new love and second chances
Of spring days and fall dances
Of summer romance and winter nights
This is my fire of life.
Dedicated to clinteastwood95 for breaking my writers block. Thanks buddy!
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#2 2009-07-15 19:52:58
- TheGremlin
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Re: Heart Notes
Nice work Fen! I'm glad to see the blocks gone, and glad to see the poet is still there!
I can't say I know the 'in depth' stuff about poetry, but as a general reader of this, I did enjoy it a lot. I like how you've used that slight repetition in a few bits, the;
FenrirFinale wrote:
And tears start to spill
Spill over in a flood of gratitude
and the
FenrirFinale wrote:
But under it all is the hope
Hope of new love and second chances
Using 'spill' and 'hope' within the last line and first line of those I thought was really effective.
I felt like "awww'ing" after reading this. I don't know why...I just did.
So was there anything in particular that inspired you to write this?
Glad to see the writers block has gone, keep it up Fen! 
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But it's gonna be my year
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#3 2009-07-15 19:55:56
- FenrirFinale
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Re: Heart Notes
Well the inspiration comes from a few certain songs I've been listing to today. The kind that bring tears to your eyes.
Generally I don't like repetition but I personally thought it fit this poem.
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#4 2009-07-16 22:18:46
- Moonfur
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Re: Heart Notes
-.- 0.0 -.- 0.0 WOW,Amazing.*hugs*I....somehow...I actually sung that.out loud.
"In the time it took for you to walk down one little hallway,I went to London,got my head blown off,and came back."-Schrodinger-Hellsing "Now lets go die like mangy dogs!"-bernadotte-hellsing "Please Mr. Bernadette,do not smoke inside me."-Seras-hellsing
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#5 2009-07-17 00:19:15
- FenrirFinale
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Re: Heart Notes
It does kinda seem like song now that I look at it.
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#6 2009-07-17 19:22:24
- Moonfur
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Re: Heart Notes
lol*hugs*
"In the time it took for you to walk down one little hallway,I went to London,got my head blown off,and came back."-Schrodinger-Hellsing "Now lets go die like mangy dogs!"-bernadotte-hellsing "Please Mr. Bernadette,do not smoke inside me."-Seras-hellsing
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#7 2009-07-17 21:46:52
- FenrirFinale
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Re: Heart Notes
* hugs back *
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#8 2009-07-23 10:14:51
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Re: Heart Notes
That was really good. It made me feel kinda sad really.
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#9 2009-07-23 11:55:26
- FenrirFinale
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Re: Heart Notes
One thing I'm proud to say is that each of my poems carries a different emotion some good some bad but the key to it is that they each give a different meaning to each person that reads them.
Thank you for the complement Bluemoon.
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#10 2009-07-23 21:33:02
- clinteastwood95
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Re: Heart Notes
Yes! I See My Name!
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#11 2009-07-23 21:49:21
- FenrirFinale
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Lol.
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