The Werewolf Café The Werewolf Café

You are not logged in.

#1 2008-09-29 19:21:17

FenrirFinale
Member
From: N.C. Look me up
Registered: 2008-06-02
Posts: 12222

" A Ship Called Me "

Once at night, on a stormy sea

There was a ship known simply as Me

The winds were rough and the waves reached high

Yet the the crew of this ship refused to die

And if rocks rise up this ship will break

Tossed so carelessly in the storm's wake

Yet now the wind dies and the waves settle down

And in the distance the crew sights solid ground

This storm is over but more lay ahead

So the ship named Me rests in its bed


So I'm going to be entering this in a contest soon and I want everyone's thoughts on it. So respond soon!


Always happy to chat so add me on Kik at ArcticRhapsody.

Seize the Night~

Offline

 

#2 2008-10-01 13:02:20

punxnotdead
Member
From: Canada...eh?
Registered: 2006-05-09
Posts: 11300

Re: " A Ship Called Me "

I think you did and excellent job on it. I think your poetry writing abilities have much improved and this has a good theme to it - that are our own ships, and when hard times strike, we must "weather the storm" so to speak and I think you presented a nice explanation of that.


I'm an aspiring bodybuilder! smile
"Be yourself to be free." - The Unseen
I <3 SMALLVILLE!!!

Offline

 

#3 2008-10-01 22:25:18

FenrirFinale
Member
From: N.C. Look me up
Registered: 2008-06-02
Posts: 12222

Re: " A Ship Called Me "

Thanks Punx! You hit the nail right on the head. I was trying for that point exactly! I thought of this poem Sunday night after a " storm " started. I wrote it the next day and I decided that it will be the second poem I enter in the contest.

The only other one that I've picked is " Falling " and I can enter one more. But a muse hasn't appeared for that one yet! LOL!

Last edited by FenrirFinale (2008-10-01 22:49:27)


Always happy to chat so add me on Kik at ArcticRhapsody.

Seize the Night~

Offline

 

Board footer

Powered by PunBB 1.2.14
© Copyright 2002–2005 Rickard Andersson

In Association with Amazon.com   In Association with Zazzle.com
page counter View Statistics